A 4: My evaluation

This is my self-evaluation against OCA quality criteria. The next tab is a copy of my tutor’s written feedback and my responses to it.

1. My evaluation against OCA Quality Criteria

1.1 Demonstration of technical and visual skills – Materials, techniques, observational skills, visual awareness, design and compositional skills. 

My main material here is the story of a dream and near death experience. I audiotaped it, cleaned up the tape, and used it as the basis for the images I shot to illustrate the story. This is the first time I have created a slide show with audio to illustrate someone’s memory of an event.

My use of black framing to suggest darkness and death works well. Moving these images around the frame or bring them in and out, such as the heart that stops and then restarts, is powerful when allied with the audio words.

I was concerned that my ECG heart monitor sounds were clichéd but they are a short-hand for life and death and have learnt associations and power for many people. I had similar feelings about the wave sound but at the begging they marry well and also at the very end when I suggest the resolution of waves on the beach.

1.2 Quality of outcome – Content, application of knowledge, presentation of work in a coherent manner, discernment, conceptualisation of thoughts, communication of ideas. 

I have selected 8 of 23 minutes of interview to illustrate. This divides it into four related pieces of audio to make the three parts to the story; dream, death and meaning. I think that there is a coherence to the work and the audio story drives the work. I am not sure as I submit it how much text to include and today I am thinking about reducing the words that appear to only those that trigger feelings, emotions or confusion.

I have shown my work to several people who find element of it moving; it seems to tap into personal experiences of hospitals, people’s fear, health and death.

1.3 Demonstration of creativity – Imagination, experimentation, invention. 

My work is experimental, I have not seen a slide show like this. The use of framed body parts is intentional and is to prefigure the death nature of the piece. I have experimented with background, text and labelling, colour and sounds.

1.4 Context – Reflection, research, critical thinking. 

There are two streams of research that informed my work; ideas and work about ‘the body’ and presenting a story. Normally my work would start with theory but this time it began with an interview, research about presenting stories, then images and ideas about the body particularly the work of Thomas Florschuetz’s ‘Early body figures 1989-90.’ Currently I am not clear what I have created but I know that, like Jon Spence, I have constructed a person’s identity which is clinical, distant and fractured, as is the place of action, and contrast with the measured tones and warmth of this person’s narrative.

1.5 Possible future areas of work

I will do more slide and mixed media shows in the future to illustrate my work – video next time. I would like to do a fabricated story such as ‘Redlands’ which I have a copy of.


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2.1 Link to Tutor’s feedback, my responses and changes made